Notes.

 I'm working on a short with Richard Byrne and Laura Schlachtmeyer. Little do they know this is part of my PhD journey.

Here are Laura's notes. Followed by Richard's notes in all caps. The "You know, more yellow" is an old joke.

1. Title can be shorter than 10 seconds

2. Opening music could be more tension, excitement, nerves, less ominous and more busy. You know, more yellow. 

3. Can the second bubble at the beginning say "You have a new message" instead of "voicemail"? (Maybe that fits in the bubble better anyway)

4. Can the last bubble at the end say "Disconnecting" instead of "Good Bye"?

1. Title can be shorter than 10 seconds (I AGREE; MUCH.) 

2. Opening music could be more tension, excitement, nerves, less ominous and more busy. You know, more yellow. (BUZZY? AGITATED? FIZZY?) 

3. Can the second bubble at the beginning say "You have a new message" instead of "voicemail"? (Maybe that fits in the bubble better anyway) (YES)

4. Can the last bubble at the end say "Disconnecting" instead of "Good Bye"? (YES)