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Chris McGuire's Notes:
Hi Andrew
Thank you for a commentary that details so much about the intent of the film and narrative arch. And for supplying direct references to David’s notes on the last review.
You raise some interesting points in your research particularly surrounding the role of music and its enaction with visuals. There is an interesting comparison made between Goldsmith’s approach to scoring against Guonadottir, perhaps they are both products of their time period in film music history in this regard: Goldsmith perhaps had greater freedoms to make those statements.
You draw on your references well which can be heard in your score.
Act 4
This has a bold opening which works well especially the timps. At 20s the audio mix moves towards some dead space. Some sound design/ambience could be present there to tie us over to the introduction of the next musical moment (this might not be in your remit, but might be worth passing on your thoughts here).
A nice entry around 51s. Delicate and intriguing. The tail around 1m15s could be a touch more lingering so it doesn’t suddenly drop out. It’s a nice colouring and doesn’t take over.
2m36s the lower more aggressive string note here is a good reflection of his ominous line. 3m36s, the pitch bend works excellently, and the general setting is completely right here.
The cue through 4m15s is effective, simple and adds appropriate tension. The lingering evolution from 4m30s is great as is the slight growth through to 5 minutes. You really allow this tone to evolve and develop: culminating in a nice figure that takes us towards 5m30s with low woods exposing a new colour here.
At 5m40s the opening woodwind pitches are distracting, you could remove these and start with the 3rd pitch only, with a more subtle fade in. As those acoustic elements are removed from the pulsing tone they appear at odds with one another in close proximity. Through 6minutes to 6m24s the low end percussion feels totally out of place. It plays on cliché and isn’t subtle in heightening the tension. What could be more effective is using drones and pads along with low orchestral colours to push us through this sustained sequence. Drawing on features such as pitch bends that you have established in the palette earlier would work well and tease out an ominous feeling. You could also double the pulsing tone with orchestral forces too as the camera pulls back.
From 6m44s the percussive hits are a little heavy handed. Pulsating synths and ominous drones get the sense of threat across on their own.
8m24s, this short musical injection isn’t needed in my opinion, the shot and dialogue are enough to frame the moment. 9m the hit and start of this cue is too forceful too early. Either it needs to enter more subtly and land on the exterior shot or be held back a few seconds till we see the exterior.
The introduction of melodic and more sentimental movements reflect your goal in the commentary. The piano and woods/sax in particular could benefit from more reverb to get a lingering wash across at the end of cues, they appear quite dry. The change at 9m55s to a more ominous synth based setting is quite stark and suddenly removes this sentimental language you have established. It doesn’t need to be as heavy handed here. You build tension well after the ‘I am very lucky’ line. Around 10m45s the second pairing of string notes are a little bare and could be covered with pad/low woods. The cluster moving through 11m05s is brilliant, it just encroaches on the dialogue slightly, mix this moment down a touch.
As the android turns and smiles, there could be the continuing sense of threat to draw on her sudden change of character, it is unnerving to the audience and could be highlighted. That would segue nicely into juxtaposing with the delicate piano line following this. 11m40s, this drone starts far too loud, it could be subtle and then sweep over the whole scene. Again the percs at the close are ineffective.
Act 5
Leaving room between longer musical phrases ensures that spotting is well balanced in this act. You have chosen good sound sources to punctuate moments in the narrative such as the moment at 4m25s.
What I’d like to see is some of the tail ends of these cues lingering a touch longer to supply cover and extend the sense of aura after moments like at 4m25s. There is something excruciating about overly loud footsteps that follow! This totally destroys a great ambience and atmosphere you have established. (granted the sound mix isn’t cleaned up yet).
There are some evocative pulsing synths that are effective in raising the tension; this is particularly well done over the sustained shots such as the passage through 1m50s to 2m. From here you maintain the tension well through to 2m50s using gritty synths and drones interspersed with percs to good effect.
Occasionally, as in Act 4 the percs are not needed and disrupt the sense of tension for me. Looking at the passage between 4m50s and 5m05s, the percs + delays completely crowd this space that could have been left with that simple but effective ticking synth before the edgy entry at 5m11s. from here the percussion does add some extra momentum which is warranted.
The strings through the extended exterior shot from 5m56s to 7m are too dry, they would benefit from cover or perhaps something more repetitive and expansive than short fragmented melodies in order to reflect the scale of the shot. More texture could have been added to reflect the ‘forcefield’ that is consuming most of the shot particularly at first in this sequence.
The sense of foreboding from 7m09 works well, the shift at 8m04s is over-scored. Currently, to the audience, nothing has changed yet; yes there could be a rise in the tension at the mention of setting up a perimeter but a shift so drastic as this diminishes the western character’s entrance.
The interaction between Varl and the Cameron from 9m20s could be reinforced within the score, the music loses focus and it is unclear which direction this interaction is going. Ramping up the tension as the Cameron starts to realise what is at stake would add direction here.
Act 6
There is a sense of urgency building towards 2m13s, driven especially by the repeated motifs in strings. The hit is far too large at 2m14s and could be scaled back; it draws on a cliché and would underpin Cameron’s facial expression more appropriately if the punctation was more subtle: try a sub and the sliding synths only and take out percs.
The mix feels a little rough in this act, moments where the score completely swamps the dialogue. Some musical elements are overly loud such as the sliding pitch at 1m21s.
Act 7
The spotting from the opening of this act feels frantic: the score is caught between maintaining the urgency around action sequences whilst pausing on cuts to interior moments. As a result of this fragmentation there is no sense of cohesion; action is lost and moments to allow for dialogue feel underplayed. Relying solely on strings for the shoot out at the opening is simply not carrying enough force and energy in the context of the sound palette used elsewhere in other acts. It feels thin and slightly cheap.
Percussive elements are over-stated (from 1m21s) and create a safety net rather than a sense of chaos. Lower piano lines work, there could be more movement in the textural synth pads (sliding pitches, increasing detunes). Percussion could have been consisting of shorter ticky-tackies instead of these bigger hits, any other sound design is going to be in favour over these perc hits and reduce the score’s impact.
The moment at 2m48s is overplayed. From 2m57s the elements of the score lack any sense of cohesion with one another. Strings, pulsing zebra synth and percs are all acting independently; this is a sequence that could be tying all these characters together before the robots/spacecraft engage each other. There is no reflection of the impacts or hit points in this action sequence. There could have been shifts made when the spacecraft seemingly crashes and the red robot keels over.
There is a nice change in energy at 4m10s for the foot chase. Again, the number of layers you have through this sequence (to 4m49s) is simply not enough; adding more textural glue will enable you to create further evolution in your sound palette as opposed to relying on melodic shapes and rhythmic patterns.
The melancholic approach from 4m56s offers a refreshing turn in the score.
Pacing is effective in the next sequence allowing for diaglogue to 7m08s. There is an awkward pause in the score after ‘I have returned to a pre-existing state’ at 7m12s. Extend the previous cue. The short interspersing taps on lower strings punctuate the realisation of the role the captain and Cameron played, the sustained note from 8m20s feels forced; moving away from strings for this moment would offer variety here. The closing notes on the piano work well, the sustained higher pitched string note could be taken out.
Act 8
The chaotic nature of the opening of this cue could offer a transition to the suspense material just after 30s to ensure cohesion between the two moods you are aiming for. Layers are again overly exposed on the whole and could benefit from thickening the orchestration (use of pads/drones alongside acoustic orchestral elements particularly the tremolo strings, lower woods and piano at the close). The score could reflect the explosion at 1m33s, either by building up to this point or landing more urgently after this moment.
In summary, there are moments of highly effective juxtapositions between synth/acoustic elements that are well-realised. Particularly in Act 4 and Act 5. The quality of this deteriorates somewhat in the final few acts. Action sequences could have been better realised by use of more intricate textures as opposed to relying on 2 or 3 sound sources to carry the impact through melody or aleatoric rhythm for sustained periods; the effect wears off. Percussion is often heavy-handed when more consideration to intricate rhythmic devices would have built more tension.
You clearly have good instincts for spotting and placing of music; you are sensitive to leaving space for dialogue. If a sequence starts to feel too fragmented as a result, we need to create glue in the score that can underpin the dialogue without crowding it to retain a sense of atmosphere. There are some cues that end too abruptly for me, more expansive use of reverb would reflect the setting and the musical language you are using.
All the best, and congratulations for completing your final submission!
Chris
Research Good
Creative Good
Technical Good
Practical Fair
Chris McGuire's Summary:
In summary, there are moments of highly effective juxtapositions between synth/acoustic elements that are well-realised. Particularly in Act 4 and Act 5. The quality of this deteriorates somewhat in the final few acts. Action sequences could have been better realised by use of more intricate textures as opposed to relying on 2 or 3 sound sources to carry the impact through melody or aleatoric rhythm for sustained periods; the effect wears off. Percussion is often heavy-handed when more consideration to intricate rhythmic devices would have built more tension.
You clearly have good instincts for spotting and placing of music; you are sensitive to leaving space for dialogue. If a sequence starts to feel too fragmented as a result, we need to create glue in the score that can underpin the dialogue without crowding it to retain a sense of atmosphere. There are some cues that end too abruptly for me, more expansive use of reverb would reflect the setting and the musical language you are using.
David Denyer's Notes:
Hi Andrew,
Thanks for this final submission, and nicely in-depth commentary, and congratulations on the completion of this work!
It’s great to see the previous feedback taken to heart - these changes have made a big difference in a number of areas and it’s pulled up this work quite a bit. The commentary generally was a really good breakdown of your process but could certainly have gone more in depth in regards to the research - which particular cues of which particular composers interested you most? Score inserts, cue timecodes, specific referencing to your own cues, maybe notations of your themes, etc could all really add to the evidencing of research here. Your bibliography cites a few composers and lists their wikipedia pages - what’s really needed here is reference to specific films, or even specific tracks, more specificity, more focus.
Act 4
Pulling back a lot of the overscored moments in this act have really helped this scene along. The volume seems much better now and the scenes really work in a much more subtle way, which helps give the actors more room to perform and really lets the scenes breathe much more. It’s nice! I even think you could go further , believe it or not - I get the sense that some of these heavy percussion hits are still a bit much and some sequences (especially around 6 minutes, at the end of the conversation scene) could find a less heavy handed way to handle suspense. I would argue that some of your sequences could do with more directionality. For instance, 6:30 - 7:09 feels quite flat and it’s a shame because this sequence does have quite a nice visual narrative, and a fairly directional journey. I would try and find a way to make this sequence more of a journey for the audience such that you’re helping the visuals to reveal certain things and emphasise certain shots - for instance, the shot at 6:41, the moment at 7:03. This kind of “flat” scoring really suits the visual and aural nihilism of Zimmer’s oeuvre of work, but this film is shot with a little more humanity, I think, than Blade Runner 2049 and these little visual journeys are worth reflecting. The entry at 9:00 feels a bit early - this could be more of a pre-tail and less of a big hit.
Act 5
Again nice work taking onboard the feedback from before. The newer focus on subtlety works much better. This scene from 2:58 works really nicely - adds just the right amount of tension in just the right places. The percussion towards the end of this scene still feels like a bit much. Maybe mix it lower - the distant percussion idea is quite nice but here it’s a bit distracting. I still don’t like the synth sound at 1:29 - just feels a bit dated. Many synth plugins have presents that sound really quite silly in cinematic contexts and this may be one of them. Certainly an aggressive low pass on this to kill the laser-quest sci-fi buzziness would be a good idea. Really love this stuff at 5:23. But again the point about directionality comes up - this section feels a little bit flat and could follow the visual narratives a bit more closely. I think your synth pads do quite well but the percussion is just a bit predictable and a little samey. The vista at 5:52 is nice but I do feel it’s missing something. In the orchestration - more middle voices, something a bit more weighty perhaps, more doubling, more octave doubling, more harmonies maybe. The staccati strings at 6:45 make a lovely textural shift but feel a bit exposed up there. Maybe down a couple of octaves would work. Ambient, sporadic percussion works well around 7:10. Nice stinger at 8:04, sets up the impending threat nicely, but might be a bit overdone. The wide shot exposes their vulnerability, true, but your music does pre-empt the reveal. It would be lovely, though, at this point to maybe have a chord progression of some kind. It all feels very very droney, and while that’s quite genre appropriate, for this bigger moments, like 8:04, maybe a move from the tonic up to the subdominant minor and back again would be a great basis for some kind of thematic statement. I think you rely on drones a little too much and you miss a few opportunities for nice thematic moments. Overall nice work though.
Act 6
This opening stinger, again I feel the need maybe for a chord progression or some kind of bassline movement, as the drones are just feeling a bit too static. Atmospheres from 0:30 are really nice and subtle. Nice hitpoint at 1:06 but it’s just rather too loud for me - could certainly be mixed back a bit. Bassline at 1:12 is lovely - this is more of what I’ve been getting at. More of this kind of thing would be great. 1:33, lovely. Love these bends. Lovely build at 1:55 - but I think it’s mixed too loud, the dialogue is obscured. Same for the hitpoint at 2:14 - lovely hitpoint, but somewhat overdone - probably just 10db or so too loud.
Act 7
Nice opening stinger, but this synth pulse that lasts just a few seconds feels a bit random. The exposed string angular lines at 0:17 are quite nice lines but they feel a bit exposed and need a bit of help. It also feels like the spotting is quite random here - it should probably be matched with the movement of the gun about 3 seconds earlier. A staccato pedal underneath this would do wonders, I think. Sequence at 0:37 is tricky. It’s a shame because certainly part of the problem is the filmmaking which lingers on these relatively slow shots (robot moving away, protagonist running, etc) which aren’t terribly exciting but the film clearly requires some kind of tension. With that in mind you’ve done a good job but I think probably a faster percussion undercurrent might help. Your work all feels a bit slow and epic here and maybe something more in line with action scoring convention would sit better. It also might not, but the laboriousness of your music actually accentuates the slowness of the filming here and this doesn’t help things. 1:30 is working quite nicely, love the piano stuff. Probably some kind of percussive or other kind of constant undercurrent could subtly help to keep consistency - as it stands the erraticness of the music is a teensy bit distracting. At 2:53, strings feel very exposed. Maybe lower octave and on cello would work better. Sequencing here is also a bit of an issue - these string parts are one of the very few parts of the sequencing that isn’t convincing - you’ve done a fine job elsewhere. Needs more dynamics, more expression control, more spice. This ship battle from 3:26 is lovely. Really love this sequence. Love the slightly ethereal quality here too. Gliss at 4:45 is great, love this way to end a cue. Great tonal shift too. Love the intense basses at 8:21. Great way to bring in synths. Really grungy sound. Perhaps too overstated though.
Act 8
Fight sequence feels a bit exposed as some of the others have done. Shame to have no sync point at 1:17, but the explosion is a good one to hit.
Overall there’s some great work here, much of which I could certainly see appearing in a professional context. There’s still a general tendency to lean towards overscoring and some moments go a bit heavy on the percussion. Drones feel a bit over-weighted from time to time. Otherwise, some great changes from last time and it’s really nice to see previous feedback responded too. Research could do with much more intensity and focus in order to bring this probably more in line with convention (comparisons with scenes from BSG, for instance, might really help you to get a sense of where you’re overscoring). Production overall is good with very few exceptions. Strong work!
Research: FAIR
Creative: GOOD
Technical: GOOD
Practical: GOOD
Kind regards,
David
David Denyer's Summary:
Overall there’s some great work here, much of which I could certainly see appearing in a professional context. There’s still a general tendency to lean towards overscoring and some moments go a bit heavy on the percussion. Drones feel a bit over-weighted from time to time. Otherwise, some great changes from last time and it’s really nice to see previous feedback responded too. Research could do with much more intensity and focus in order to bring this probably more in line with convention (comparisons with scenes from BSG, for instance, might really help you to get a sense of where you’re overscoring). Production overall is good with very few exceptions. Strong work!
Douglas Black Heaton's Notes:
Hi Andrew,
Thanks for sending in your final project - I'm really interested to see what you've done. It's a great achievement to reach this stage and well done on finding such an interesting project to work on!
Research
Obviously, some classic references there with the late, great Jerry Goldsmith on Alien and Planet of the Apes, but also some good contemporary sci-fi references with Blade Runner 2049 (not sure how contemporary this is as a throwback to Vangelis but the updated retro-analogue sound is very popular these days) and especially Gudnadottir who is very much the flavour of the moment (although I guess you'll have started this before Chernobyl hit the screens).
It's good that you've identified questions to ask of your own music and been able to analyse the references you mentioned to try and answer those questions. Listening to your score you can hear how you've been influenced by the references and how you've tried to solve those problems. Your in-depth commentary is really useful as a window into your approach. You've also provided your answers to review feedback which is very useful.
The Bibliography links to Wikipedia don't really add anything on their own - we're all familiar with the composers. Links to films, scenes etc. that influenced you would be more useful.
I'm going to go through the different acts now..
ACT 4
Strong opening, although it sounded a little dated to me - timpani used like that are more classic Goldsmith/Williams. The spotting where you score the "outside" moments and go quiet for the "inside" moments feels a little jarring in places (e.g. 00:37) - some kind of overlap would be useful to tie the scenes together.
00:52 nice subtle scoring here as they introduce the android idea. Strange to cut it so suddenly at 01:13. This happens again when the theme is re-introduced and disappears at 01:45. Should I assume these spotting decisions are the directors?
02:13 "went rogue" .. maybe slightly ahead of the dialogue here.
03:27 "Righteous" nice moment but again disappears very quickly.
04:12 "since you're on our side now". Nice subtle synth dive for the uncertainty.
04:48 nice build into more melodic material. 05:19 could keep more of the background atmosphere going as it goes a little flat despite the cello still playing.
05:41 "what's your goal here?". Nice build but the percussion feels too heavy.
06:30 this synth dive feels too forceful. A real element of imminent danger that we're not getting visually. Your commentary says the danger is there but I would consider starting more subtly, building to the entry of the robot. Again, the percussion is too heavy.
08:13 "looking for the capsule" - not sure on the point of this sound design. Sounds like a sound effect that doesn't really link to anything. Instead of thinking "android" I was wondering where the hydraulic lift was.
09:02 Transition through to the Sagan scene is ok although a little heavy, possibly a bit early too. The hit at 09:20 feels very over the top for the moment.
09:33 The piano feels out of place with the rest of the score - you mentioned wanting emotional investment in your commentary but this stands out too much. I would consider processing it more. Either glitching, adding delays or a big reverb to give it more character within the score.
11:00 this build up of dissonance works but, in my opinion, feels too unfocused and covers the "I feel like that all the time" dialogue.
11:32 "When they die". Nice build following this and good transition although again the percussion is too heavy.
Tech note: There's an underlying buzz to the score of Act 4- evident on the mp3 where I assumed it was from the sync sound on the mp4. This should be dealt with.
ACT 5
I note that you've removed percussion from the start as per your review notes. Good that you took them onboard as this scene feels natural enough without.
01:19 transition across the outside to Delta works ok. The sound here feels a bit random (with added gulls), perhaps that's the plan. Again the percussion is too much. There's also a percussive synth that sounds a bit cheesy "who wants to be a millionaire". I'm not sure you need that added percussion but if yes I'd find a different sound.
01:58 This hit works well as does the tail. Perhaps a little more reverb.
02:11 Opening works well but then I would back off a bit. Lose the percussion and the rest can be mixed lower to provide more ambience. At 02:49 I can hear a faint dive in the background but otherwise this feels flat as though the music finished nicely and then starts suddenly again moments later only to disappear again. The tail could do with more reverb to leave the sound hanging in the air rather than abruptly cutting off.
03:39 The ominous low tones work well here. Understated.
04:29 the music dies away but would work better if it connected to the cue at 04:33
05:00 The percussion is too much. The rest works well enough.
05:52 It works to keep this music going over the transition. The dark strings introduced here work well. I like the echoing of the lines between speakers although this is a long walk and would have been a great opportunity for more developed thematic material as it's a long time with little visual interest to keep the tension going. The spiccato strings at 06:45 that echo between speakers are incredibly dry. These could benefit from reverb.
08:00 Setting up the perimeter. Most of this works but again the overuse of heavy percussion detracts. I would also start more subtly with tension and introduce the imminent danger element only when we see Varl - now you're pre-empting.
08:27 Good to keep the tension through here although it dissipates at 08:48 when there's a real threat. This is very threatening and that tension isn't really reflected in the music. The edit is a bit flabby so the music needs to work overtime to keep the tension going.
09:45 This is too early. He's just made a threat but still speaking. Should be tension until he disappears and then have the ominous motif across the transition and shot of the spaceship.
11:47 A good end to the scene but does run over the dialogue a bit. I know this soundmix will be cleaned but you might already need to tamp down the music until the dialogue is clear. The directors want to hear their dialogue otherwise your tension ending to the scene will be compromised when they turn the volume down and then up again.
ACT 6
Opening hit is a bit cliched. A like the subtle opening of the scene - it's quite atmospheric/drone-like but I think it works well in this context.
01:07 Too big a hit for this moment. The dive/wind down would be fine. Perhaps wait a beat or two more before starting the section with strings.
Nice sense of tension build but we're losing the dialogue - don't assume they'll mix it nicely, you need to work around the the speech. The "you got there first" silence is good but the following hit at 02:14 feels too big for the moment and then coupled with the percussion is reminiscent of a soap opera. The key ingredients are here but more subtlety is required. The continuation of the cue over the transition to 02:29 works well.
02:55 On the mp4 there are some percussion like sounds and possibly a drone but these aren't on the mp3. Is this from the sound designer?
04:12 interesting that you've not scored any of this. Seem to be some moments that would benefit from it.
04:55 strings feel a little static.
Abrupt cut off at the end of the cue on the mp4 but the mp3 is ok.
ACT 7
Heavy percussion again. I know this is part of your sound but it wears a little thin over the whole score. More subtle percussion might work.
00:13 we have the tension pulse going but then even when we see Cameron duck down and fire the music carries on in the same mode until 00:17 (after the forcefield) when it ends abruptly before we start on a completely different style cue. I think you could mark these moments musically and you could smooth out the transition between cues by using a similar palette throughout. Perhaps some spiccato occasionally on the pulse, or the pulse continuing under the spiccato later on. The action string approach works for action/tension and we need to imagine other sfx taking up audio bandwidth. The ending at 00:29 is again a bit abrupt - more reverb would tide it over. Better still, as we continue with the tension mode keep the cue running and build into the next moment.
The action moments kind of work but feel a bit disconnected. This isn't helped when you keep breaking for the Sagan conversation.
01:29 I like this but it's quite dated. The percussion heavy, piano bass is very 1970s cop movie (think Lalo Schifrin) but the synth pulls it forward a bit. Perhaps the piano could be processed or glitched in a way that makes it sound less like a piano.
01:56 Nice tender moment however it stays tender even when she says "who are you?" and he points a gun at her (02:25). I would expect some musical variation on the news that she was a robot and then the danger.
03:00 from around this moment it gets a little chaotic - lots of stuff happening in the score but it doesn't feel like it hangs together. In particular the synth and strings seem to be doing their own thing. There's a high melody which has potential but feels almost heroic whilst following Yarl (our villain) this tone continues even when stuff blows up. Whilst we have an all round action feel the music doesn't seem to be be marking the visuals particularly. There are moments where you would expect a musical moment or tonal shift (e.g. ship hitting the robot and the robot collapsing) that aren't really reacted to.
04:22 the percussion for the chase on foot works better as it's more subtle. It feels like it's part of the score rather than the overly bombastic hits in other parts.
04:50 I'm not sure you can just cut here unless you know when the explosion sound will occur. Given that we only see the smoke later I would assume there is a gap between Yarl disappearing and the explosion. This timing is important.
05:00 Nice change of tone. Some of the more aggressive synths could be toned down but the the melancholy feel is good.
06:07 this works well. It has tension and interest. Nice melodic moments too. The bigger percussion is not required.
07:12 Why does the music end here when the revelation suggests more to come? A pre-existing state? What does that mean? There should be tension.. keep the cue going and blend into the next one.
The higher melodic strings work well.
08:20 This pedal note is too aggressive here. I can understand a quick burst of this but to keep it going for so long feels unnatural.
08:43 Piano works ok but as before, perhaps make it something more than a piano.
ACT 8
The opening works well although again, the piano bass action feels a little dated for me (as before).
00:19 the score goes flat here but the fighting and tension are ongoing. There's a gap before some sparse percussion. I would keep the action/tension moving until Delta gets the upper hand at 00:28. Consider continuing further and merging into the tension at 00:33 as we're not sure what Delta will do.
The drone and string scoring works ok but was surprised that although Varl is screaming and we're obviously on a countdown to an explosion at 01;18 the music calmly dies away instead of playing to this moment.
Overall, There are some nice creative ideas here but I found the implementation very uneven. The spotting is sensitive in some areas - perhaps too sensitive in breaking up the natural flow of the music for dialogue - but lacking in other areas. Visual moments that would need marking or changes in tone go by un-served. Some cues start and stop very abruptly in a way that jars - reverb could help with blending the tails. The instrumentation and orchestration doesn't quite gel as a sound for the film and is something that could be be worked on. The massive timpani/percussion hit sound is something to be used sparingly for effect - too often here it's a way of trying to inject drama/tension. Lots of the percussion could be stripped out to leave the more interesting layers underneath. Some of the scoring sounds dated - perhaps a result of the Goldsmith references. I think the hybrid balance between string/synth could be more balanced in some areas (e.g. action). I can see that you've acted on the feedback of several reviews and stripped back the score but I think you could go further and aim for more consistent subtlety than the bombastic moments.
Research: FAIR
Creative: GOOD
Technical: GOOD
Practical: FAIR
Congratulations on completing the final project and good luck with the movie!
Cheers,
Doug
Douglas Black Heaton's Summary:
Final Project "Edge of Oblivion" - There are some nice creative ideas here but I found the implementation very uneven. The spotting is sensitive in some areas - perhaps too sensitive in breaking up the natural flow of the music for dialogue - but lacking in other areas. Visual moments that would need marking or changes in tone go by un-served. Some cues start and stop very abruptly in a way that jars - reverb could help with blending the tails. The hybrid instrumentation and orchestration doesn't quite gel as a sound for the film and is something that could be worked on. The massive timpani/percussion hit sound is something to be used sparingly for effect - too often here it's a way of trying to inject drama/tension. Lots of the percussion could be stripped out to leave the more interesting layers underneath. Some of the scoring sounds dated - perhaps a result of the Goldsmith references. I think the hybrid balance between string/synth could be more balanced in some areas (e.g. action). I can see that you've acted on the feedback of several reviews and stripped back the score but I think you could go further and aim for more consistent subtlety than the bombastic moments. Good luck with the rest of the movie!
Tim Johnson's Notes:
Congratulations on the completion of your degree Andrew!
What happens next?
Your marks will be moderated and then presented at the next exam board in February. If the board is satisfied that you have met the criteria for the award to be given you will be notified by post with transcripts of your grades. You will also be invited to attend the 2020 graduation ceremony in October/November.
