I'm trying to cleanup my inbox. So I'm posting these notes from the Marsian Queene here:
One thing about the theater - the first Triad scene around 9:43 is the right color correction. I think there is one after that, that is too dark, around 15:27. If we can't see the surrounding theater we get confused about why she is so tiny and distant.
I think? also maybe we lost the vignette in Popsicle in some later scenes.
Now I make the following rules and we can argue about them.
1. No weirdness inside scenes till after "fur coat" scene.
The weirdness has to build up. Right now I feel like the weirdness is all blended in. (I know this is not literally true but slightly true.)
So in the part before fur-coat, no snow in the junkyard, no water behind her in the Triad. We can use the "weird" takes, like the reflection takes in the junkyard and Triad. (I don't know if you have, but if you have it's ok under This Rule.) We can put lots of weirdness in the transitions between scenes (as you have done) but the scenes themselves should have no additional effects.
Exception: the very first moment "You ask about Jud Suss?" should be as weird as possible. I like what you have right now but it could be more? if you are tempted to do something else, more?
2. No dipping to black, no actual break from the action.
Need to fill in all the interludes with visuals. The last interlude with the redness is nice! We can't sit in blackness because it drops the build and rhythm.
3. No "swapping" the color corrections.
Popsicle needs to stay b/w and junkyard needs to stay color. Weirdness can happen but they can't switch. It could snow in Popsicle. Water could happen in junkyard. Vignetting can happen in Triad.
Exception: In Popsicle when she talks about Jugend and shooting it in color - keep what you have where she talks about how great it was to shoot in color. Then back to black & white as you have.
|Other various color-corrections. Actually, two are the same I believe.|